憶星 - 2006/10/6 12:53:00
title: i got a cold
i got a cold,
'cause i took the CAHSEE all day yesterday.
i got a cold,
'cause the air conditioning in that freaking big test room was freaking strong.
i got a cold,
who care i got a cold.
i got a cold,
i got a cold...
but
i still came to school today.
i almost fall asleep all periods,
the teacher screamed at me,
'cause i got a cold...
"a--chi---!"
excuse me,
i got a cold.
BTW
other people said that the fool never got a gold,
so,i got a cold.
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CAHSEE stand for: california hight school exit exam
watashia - 2006/10/6 13:11:00
憶星(okuhoshi) 12:59:15
我終于成爲第一個因爲感冒而寫第一篇英文詩的詩人了
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恭喜你成为第一個因爲感冒而寫第一篇英文詩的詩人……
为表庆贺，特给你加精 -v-b
pntgd - 2006/10/6 13:24:00
Full of humour...and mistakes, = =||
but a nice 'poem',if it is a one.
And the next:
Excuse me for my correcting your mistakes:
以下引用憶星在2006-10-6 12:53:18的发言：
i almost fall sleeo all periods,
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i almost fall
asleep all periods,
And please pay attention to your tense form.
You'd better use the past from.Then, the past form of
'fall' should be
'fell'. = =|||
And the last mistake...(orz) you miss an article here:
other people said that a(or the) fool never got a gold,
憶星 - 2006/10/6 13:29:00
thanks upstairs' honest-v-
[strike]turth me that just fingering mistake-v-bb[/strike]
mindless - 2006/10/6 13:31:00
我觉得，诗里面的时态稍有问题
私以为，应该是过去时啊 （到学校，打瞌睡，老师的咆哮……）
QuinMantha - 2006/10/6 14:12:00
对‘英文语文’恨之入骨的某人。。。
加起来恐怕不到100字的诗要人写几百字的‘分析’。。。
[strike]i recomment 'fucking' instead of 'freaking', sometimes its hard to express ur true feelings without using the word[/strike]
憶星 - 2006/10/7 10:07:00
中譯
《我感冒了》
我感冒了，
都怪昨天考了一天的試。
我感冒了，
都怪那太大的考試室冷氣開得太冷。
我感冒了，
誰在乎我感冒了。
我感冒了，
我感冒了…
但
我今天還是去上學。
我幾乎每節課都在打瞌睡，
老師向我咆哮，
都怪我感冒了…
“啊—秋——！”
抱歉，
我感冒了。
對了，
別人都說笨蛋不會感冒，
所以，我感冒了。
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日譯徵集中，名為風邪詩XDD
孤独浪人 - 2006/10/13 14:03:00
星星这篇在群里发的感冒英文诗终于在文区发表了，而且还加精了，可惜可贺～～～～
liknight - 2006/10/15 3:49:00
说到感冒，想起以前写过一篇很长的文章，总结起来就是感冒了吃错药一句话— —
Lizhneg27463400 - 2006/10/15 4:31:00
excuse me.... but this is too much.... if you got a cold, you should either stay in bed(not so seriese) or go to the hospital(only applied if you are about to die.). go to school is totally unnessary.like what I do all the time ^^.
Derek - 2007/10/16 6:38:00
the title should be" just want to write AN English "poem"...[:Cry:]
z498125917 - 2007/12/8 18:33:00
好佩服文采..这也能写出来....
Ayrton - 2008/2/7 22:40:00
1） 'i' --->'I'
2) CAHSEE? NO ANY DICTIONARY tells ya that's an abbreviation of anything.
3) 'Air conditioner' should be better.
4) 'who care i got a cold'-------> 'Who CARES .....
5)''cause' -->'cuz if you're in 21cn
6)"a-chi~~~", Common Pronunciation of 'chi' is /kaɪ/
and more, Keep going, Improve yourself and EVOLVE yourself!
Ayrton - 2008/2/7 22:43:00
原帖由 QuinMantha 于 2006-10-6 14:12:50 发表
[strike]i recomment 'fucking' instead of 'freaking', sometimes its hard to express ur true feelings without using the word[/strike] |
recommend , And 'F***ing' is strictly forbidden at some place.