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[诗歌] just want to write AN english 

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title: i got a cold

i got a cold,
'cause i took the CAHSEE all day yesterday.
i got a cold,
'cause the air conditioning in that freaking big test room was freaking strong.
i got a cold,
who care i got a cold.
i got a cold,
i got a cold...
but
i still came to school today.
i almost fall asleep all periods,
the teacher screamed at me,
'cause i got a cold...
"a--chi---!"
excuse me,
i got a cold.
BTW
other people said that the fool never got a gold,
so,i got a cold.








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CAHSEE stand for: california hight school exit exam
最后编辑憶星 最后编辑于 2007-10-23 03:12:32
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『この家と、皆に幸あれ』
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憶星(okuhoshi) 12:59:15
我終于成爲第一個因爲感冒而寫第一篇英文詩的詩人了

恭喜你成为第一個因爲感冒而寫第一篇英文詩的詩人……

为表庆贺,特给你加精  -v-b
像喜剧一样。
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回复:just want to write a english&nbs

Full of humour...and mistakes, = =||
but a nice 'poem',if it is a one.

And the next:
Excuse me for my correcting your mistakes:

以下引用憶星在2006-10-6 12:53:18的发言:
i almost fall sleeo all periods,


i almost fall asleep all periods,


And please pay attention to your tense form.
You'd better use the past from.


Then, the past form of 'fall' should be 'fell'. = =|||

And the last mistake...(orz) you miss an article here:
other people said that a(or the) fool never got a gold,
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thanks upstairs' honest-v-

turth me that just fingering mistake-v-bb

『この家と、皆に幸あれ』
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我觉得,诗里面的时态稍有问题

私以为,应该是过去时啊 (到学校,打瞌睡,老师的咆哮……)
[葬送之骸窟]
“來吧,走上這長長的似乎沒有盡頭的的坂道……”
Changing encounters; Twisting fate; An unchangeable world.
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回复:just want to write a english&nbs

对‘英文语文’恨之入骨的某人。。。
加起来恐怕不到100字的诗要人写几百字的‘分析’。。。

i recomment 'fucking' instead of 'freaking', sometimes its hard to express ur true feelings without using the word
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中譯
《我感冒了》

我感冒了,
都怪昨天考了一天的試。
我感冒了,
都怪那太大的考試室冷氣開得太冷。
我感冒了,
誰在乎我感冒了。
我感冒了,
我感冒了…

我今天還是去上學。
我幾乎每節課都在打瞌睡,
老師向我咆哮,
都怪我感冒了…
“啊—秋——!”
抱歉,
我感冒了。
對了,
別人都說笨蛋不會感冒,
所以,我感冒了。

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日譯徵集中,名為風邪詩XDD

『この家と、皆に幸あれ』
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星星这篇在群里发的感冒英文诗终于在文区发表了,而且还加精了,可惜可贺~~~~
这个世界果然是不真实的…………

万年不更新的blog,浪人小屋
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回复:just want to write a english&nbs

说到感冒,想起以前写过一篇很长的文章,总结起来就是感冒了吃错药一句话— —
KANON     AIR
风风雪雪之间 长梦不觉逾千载
庸庸碌碌七年 苍穹何痛泪霄台
恍恍忽忽复返 雨过天晴云破处
愕然相见   翩翩一羽似君来
如真似幻容颜

Julián·Liknight·Hu·de Milchstraße


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excuse me.... but this is too much.... if you got a cold, you should either stay in bed(not so seriese) or go to the hospital(only applied if you are about to die.). go to school is totally unnessary.like what I do all the time ^^.
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